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The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts illustrate the primary cause
for
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 migration in and from the United Kingdom in 2007.
Overall
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,both
of
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apply
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immigration and emigration had differences in all aspects.
Nevertheless
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,their highest results are similar. In 2007 humans visited
UK
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the UK
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in
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for
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 various purposes,most of them went there for certain work,showing
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an accurately
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accurately
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 30%,
on the other hand
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,another 12% of
persons
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people
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was
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were
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look
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looking
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 for a job. Students
came
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who came
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 to
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 in education
aims
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aim
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 little but less exhibiting 26%. For Joining into was no more than 15%. Without any reason was 6% thereby indicating the lowest point among others. And others for different reasons was no more than 11%. Residents who
leaved
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left
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 from
Uk
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UK
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was
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were
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 for definite
occupation
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occupations
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 showing
peak
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a peak
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 performance
on
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of
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 29%. Meanwhile,for searched positions was exited around 22%. Individuals who preferred randomly got out,approximately 18%.
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,for joining in another environment were decided to leave on 13%. In
formal
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a formal
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 study
aims
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aim
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 was
leave
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apply
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only 4%. And others 14%.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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