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Some people say that students who achieve the highest score in their exams should be rewarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

A reward is a huge thing for some scholar to maintain their motivation. Few people believe that
students
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 should get awards if they get the highest grades in exams. Meanwhile, others say that the
student
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 who makes improvements should get compensation too. Regarding those views,
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 will elaborate on both opinions about rewards for juniors. It is true that teachers always give the
students
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 who make the highest ranking a bonus. The benefit can be a gift or a compliment. I think everyone is craving the tribute and
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 agree that
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 who give their best effort for the exam and get the highest
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 should be rewarded. Without the compliments,
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 would be disappointed and lose of catalyst. I highly
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recommended
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 the
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 who
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huge
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score
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 to get the bonus
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, what about the
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 who made the progress but didn't get the highest
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? They will be upset and disappointed if a teacher doesn't recognise the effort. In my opinion, teachers have to take notes on the progress of every
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 and give compliments to those who have made improvements.
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, the reward is not as big as the 1st Rank, in order to give
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encouragement to other
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. Taking everything into consideration, every
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 who gave their best effort should be rewarded.
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, small or big the gift or reward depends on the ranking or the
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 exam.
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, the teacher can spill the gift before the exam to boost the motivation of
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.

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Make sure to vary your sentence structures to enhance readability and engage your audience more effectively.
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Provide more specific examples or anecdotes to support your points on both arguments.
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Revise for spelling and grammar errors to ensure clarity in your writing, such as 'reccomended' which should be 'recommended'.
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You have successfully addressed both views related to rewards for students, demonstrating a balanced perspective.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction provides clarity about the topic and sets the stage for the discussion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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