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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates how average closing prices of picked metals are changing from 2013 until 2021.
Overall
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, the three metals prices seem to be much more similar in 2013,
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however
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however,
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this
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 situation changed over time and
specially
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 in 2021. Palladium at the beginning was
lowest
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the lowest
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 metal in price
from
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of
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 all the three
with
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at
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 about $600 per
oz
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 and was relatively stable in the period from 2013 to 2016,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 Palladium
then
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 began to grow substantially high throughout the years from 2016 as a start to 2021 and made it to almost $2400 per
oz
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.
Gold
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 and Platinum
on the other hand
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 began really close in price
with
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at
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 around $1500 per
oz
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then
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 they both
start
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started
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 to
fell
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fall
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 from 2013 until 2015
and
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apply
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Gold
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 was at it is lowest price
at the end
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 of
this
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 period which was almost $1250,
therefore
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after
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this
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 year
Gold
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 begin to increase despite Platinum which start to decrease until 2021
Gold
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 reach around $1750 per
oz
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also
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 Platinum near to $1000 per
oz
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oz, gold with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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