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Band 5

A friend of yours is living in another country. You would like to work in his/her country for a while. Write a letter to your friend and say – Explain why you would like to work in his/her country – Describe your skills and experience – Ask for some information about working in his/her country

Dear Sam, Hope you are doing well. I'm
thrill
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thrilled
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 to inform you that am planning to visit Japan next month
,
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apply
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 and
is
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am
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 looking forward
for
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to
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 a job opportunity.
To begin
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 with, Japan is one of the
well renowned
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 nations when it comes to precision and
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discipline
 in the work environments. As a civil engineer working in the industry for about three years now, I need to widen my
horizon
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 and start in a new place to
further
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 strengthen my career prospects.
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, I
had
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have
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 worked with companies where I was
incharge
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in charge
 of
the
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renovations and
maintance
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maintenance
, which require a set of skills like managing the modification of the building's interior and ensuring the projects are executed
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, managing time and team productivity as well.
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, I would like to know more about the working opportunities and is it foreign friendly.
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,
is
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 there any requirements needed to be eligible
to
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for
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 a certain position
.
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?
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 I'd really appreciate
if
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 you could recommend any good companies to apply for in Japan. Hope to hear from you soon and can't wait to catch up with you. Best wishes, Myth

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coherence cohesion
Consider using a more structured approach by separating the different topics more clearly into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Pay attention to minor grammatical inaccuracies and phrasing to improve overall clarity. For example, correct 'am' to 'I am' and 'is looking forward for a job opportunity' to 'am looking forward to job opportunities.'
greeting and closing
Your letter includes a warm greeting and expresses excitement about connecting with your friend, which sets a positive tone.
complete response
You have clearly outlined your motivation for working in Japan and provided relevant details about your skills and experience, which is essential for the task.
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