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The bar chart shows percentage of people in a European country going to cinemas on different days. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows percentage of people in a European country going to cinemas on different days. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illustrate
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 amount in percentage of people in
Europeans
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European
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country
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countries
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 who go to watch movies
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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7 days of week
Overall
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its
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it is
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 evidence the
starday
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Starday
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it
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apply
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is the highest
castumer
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customer
 went to
cinema
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the cinema
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 from 2003 to 2007 than other . The Thursday is lowest one who went to watch movies in 2005
According to
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 what
shown
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is shown
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 in the chart the proportion of cinema
castumer
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customer
customers
costumer
in
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on
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starday
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in
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from
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 2003 to 2007 highest increase in it was 40
percent
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 in 2003
then
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increase
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increased
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 in 2005
45
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percent
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than
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then
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 slightly
decrease
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decreased
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42
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to 42
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percent
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in
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on
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Sunday
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sunday
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Sunday
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 the watching movie
castumer
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customer
costumer
costume
 was 30
percent
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 in 2003 than rose in 2005 was 35
percent
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 than went down in 2007 31
percent
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 in Friday was steady state in 30
percent
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however
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 in Monday and
wensday
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Wednesday
 and
thersday
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Thursday
 was lowest percentage fluctuating
To sum
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up
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up,
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the the
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apply
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people prefer
the
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apply
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Saturday was
higher
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a higher
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 day to
watching
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watch
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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 and
in addition
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 the sun day
was
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is
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second
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the second
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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