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The graph shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph depicts how many enquiries the tourist information office in a certain city received between
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January
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january
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 and
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june
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of
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2011
overall
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 that
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 asked directly
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witnessed a significant increase of to 1900
number
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 of enquiries.
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 it gradually decreased to 1600 and 400 in six months. In cases of asking
question
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 by telephone , the highest
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 of questions reached 1600 and began to decline to 1400, reaching 900, but in April and
may
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, the
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 was equal to 1000
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 and
inquiries
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 .
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 the chart , email
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 reached 800
inquiries
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 and ranged between 750 and 700 and 550
inquiries
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 and they were equal in May and June with a
number
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 of 350
inquiries
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, inquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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