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Writing Samples
Band 8

You are due to start new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employeer. In your letter: •Explain your situation •Describe your problems •Tell him or her when you think you can start.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am David Samroy, who was recently interviewed on 15th of
December
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 for an Assistant manager position in your company. I sincerely express my gratitude for considering me as a successful candidate and providing me with an offer
to begin
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 on the 22nd of
December
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.
However
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, I am afraid that I won't be able
to begin
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 on the 25th of
December
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 as expected . Unfortunately, I have a surgical appointment previously booked to replace the lens in the left eye on the 22nd of
December
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. Following the surgery, I might be suggested to take a minimum of one week break from all screens and apply medication on an hourly basis. I will be able to sign my agreement in the following week on the 30th of
December
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.
However
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, it is a day from New Year's Eve and I might get busy with my family so I reconsidered to take my position on the 2nd of January 2026. I hope you will consider my request positively and I apologize for any inconvenience caused by my decision. Sincerely Yours, David

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Consider making your opening statement more concise and focused on the main purpose of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly revolves around a single idea and transitions smoothly to the next.
coherence and cohesion
When mentioning dates, ensure accuracy. For example, you mentioned starting on the 25th when your letter states the 22nd.
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The letter is polite and expresses gratitude, which demonstrates a suitable writing tone.
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You provided a clear explanation of your situation, which helps the reader understand your circumstances.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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