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Some people believe that younger generations can learn a lot about how to be good members of society from older generations. Others think it is better for younger people to get advice on how to be a good citizen from their peers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
individuales
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individuals
. Have
concern
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concerns
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 about their
children
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wich
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which
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 considerable
by
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for
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young
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the young
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generation
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.
In addition
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 , If
young
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the young
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generation
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 can learn more to be good members of society
from
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than
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old
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an old
the old
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generation
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 or they can be better
by
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than
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 their peers. In my opinion. I firmly disagree with
this
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 statement .Because
,
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apply
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i
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I
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 believe that
parents
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 are the major
resone
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reasons
 to teach their
children
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 about how to be able to be
a good members
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a good member
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 of
comunity
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community
.
However
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 , Not
every one
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everyone
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 can judge
on
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in
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 the right way like
parents
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 and will be standing behind the young people .
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 the above statement .
Parents
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 are the holding point for every
things
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thing
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 will
happening
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happen
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 in their future .
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Also
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Also,
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 the only
one
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ones
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 who
no
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know
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 these
chilldren
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children
 is their
parents
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such
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 as
,
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apply
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skills
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their skills
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,capabilities,
weknes
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weakness
, and
the
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their
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 strong point of them.
For example
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 . I always struggle in the
mathe
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main
 subject and
i
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I
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cant
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can't
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 improve my self by own skills so my
parents
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 decide to take me
for
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as
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personal
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a personal
the personal
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 teacher so
i
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I
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 can pass my subject .
Additionally
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. In every
familes
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families
family
 around the world ,The only one who
have
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has
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right
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the right
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 to
gudge
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judge
 our mistake is the family .Because they already see us from
the
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apply
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birth
so
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apply
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they
exactlly
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exactly
 have
knowldge
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knowledge
 about what the right things
for
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are for
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 us . Since
children
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 are too young to have experience about the
goodnees
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goodness
 in their lives.
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However
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However,
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 older
pepole
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people
 are not
in
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on
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 the same level
of
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as
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parents
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 because they
dont
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do not
 have enough
bacground abouth
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background about
this
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generation
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.
For
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instance
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instance,
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i
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I
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 was
employer
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employed
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 in AD POLIC
on
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in
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 past years and ,of
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course
cours
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cours,
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i
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I
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 faced a lot of
pepole
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people
 who
is
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were
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 older than me .
Moreover
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. they gave
an
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apply
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orders that
can
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could
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 not
improved
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improve
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 my skills since
that
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I
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im
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is
I'm
 younger than them so as
result
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a result
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. My
parents
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give
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gave
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 an advice to leave
this
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palce
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place
 and
found
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find
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 a place that
include
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includes
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employees that are
same
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the same
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 my age.
On
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In
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 conclusion .
Overall
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 . It's clear from my personal view that .
young
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Young
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pepole
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people
 will be more valuable if they
traning
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training
 by their
parents
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 .
Beacuse
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Because
 the
parents
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 have more
knowldge
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knowledge
 about their
children
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.
However
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 old
generation
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are
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is
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 too old and they
dont
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don't
 have enough information about young
chidren
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children
 as their
parents
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 have .

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Grammar and Spelling
Ensure proper spelling and grammar to avoid confusion. Words like 'individuales,' 'resone,' and 'comunities' should be corrected.
Clarity
Improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, the sentence 'Not every one can judge on the right way like parents' could be rephrased to 'Not everyone judges correctly like parents do.'
Balance of Views
Provide a more balanced discussion. While you have strong opinions on parents, consider discussing the benefits of peer influence more thoroughly in your essay.
Strength of Argument
You expressed a clear opinion and provided reasons supporting your view on the importance of parents in a child's development.
Use of Examples
You included relevant personal examples to illustrate your points, such as your experience with math tutoring.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealth of experience
  • historical context
  • ethical guidance
  • life skills
  • contemporary issues
  • relatable experiences
  • societal norms
  • traditional values
  • societal cohesion
  • innovative views
  • progressive views
  • intergenerational learning
  • mutual respect
  • camaraderie
  • societal unity
  • individualistic societies
  • bridging the gap
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