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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
The bar chart illustrates the estimated
illiteracy
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rates
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 among males and females across different world regions in the most recent recorded year. The figures are expressed as percentages.
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, it is evident that women had higher
illiteracy
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rates
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 than men in every region. South Asia and the Arab States recorded the highest
rates
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 of
illiteracy
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,
while
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 developed countries had the lowest, with nearly negligible percentages for both genders. In South Asia, more than 50% of women were unable to read or write, compared to just over 30% of men, indicating the largest gender disparity.
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, in the Arab States,
illiteracy
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 affected nearly half of the female population,
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 the male rate was slightly above 25%. Sub-Saharan Africa
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 showed high levels of
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, particularly among women, whose rate exceeded 40%,
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 men had a rate of around 30%.
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, East Asia and Oceania demonstrated a more moderate level of
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although
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 a noticeable gender gap remained, with female
illiteracy
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 around 20% and male
illiteracy
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 approximately 10%. Latin America and the Caribbean reported similar
rates
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 for both sexes, with a slight difference of less than 5%. Developed countries showed the lowest
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rates
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overall
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, with both male and female
rates
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 falling below 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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