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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given map illustrates the
center
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 of a small
town
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 named Islip, in current condition and plans for renovation.
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, a comparison of the maps reveals that the
town
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centre
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 has significantly transformed from a few public facilities into a more developed
center
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 for residents.
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, the roads have
also
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 changed to provide easier access. In terms of the
town
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centre
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 prior to development, there is a main
road
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 on the north
side
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 of the
town
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centre
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, and above the
road
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, there are many
shops
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 and, across that, there is countryside.
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, across the first shop complex, people can find more
shops
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.
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not far from the second
shops
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, there is a first housing with a park on the east
side
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, close to the intersection.
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, opposite the first housing
area
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, there is a second housing, and on the left
side
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, there is a school, under the intersection. Regarding the changes in the
town
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centre
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 in the future, the countryside will be demolished and transformed into a circle-like main
road
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 with two intersections on the west and east sides.
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, most of the public places will be constructed in the middle part of the main
road
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. A new bus station will be added, next to the shopping
centre
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, and beside that, a new car park will be added.
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, across that, there is a pedestrian-only
area
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 with
shops
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 on the right
side
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, and close to that, there are two housing areas. One is the old housing
area
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 and a new housing
area
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, with a park on the right
side
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. The school will be removed
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across the main
road
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 on the south
side
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, with a dual carriageway on the top
side
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, and there is a housing
area
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 near the school, which is on the east
side
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 of that.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, road, side, shops, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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