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The line graph shows the average closing prices of three precious metals (Gold, Platinum, and Palladium) between 2013 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the average closing prices of three precious metals (Gold, Platinum, and Palladium) between 2013 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart illustrates the average closing deals of specific value metals from 2013 to 2021.
Overall
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, the data shows that the metals' prices begin relatively stable
than
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apply
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the palladium metal experience arising all the way through the given years. The palladium metal prices start above 500
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dollar
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dollars
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 per oz
from
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in
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 2013 and
coming
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came
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 down till 2016. After that, the graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the raising of the metal till it
reach
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reaches
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 above 2,000
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dollar
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dollars
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at the end
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 of the given year. The two other metals, gold and platinum,
begin
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began
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 nearly the same under 1,500
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dollar
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dollars
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 and
falling
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fell
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 down until 2015 after that,
the
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apply
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gold
stay
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stayed
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 nearly stable throughout the years until it
rise
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rose
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 again in 2019
while
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the
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apply
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platinum metal falling down
till
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to
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 under 1,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 till 2020 where it slightly rise above 1,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 by 2021.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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