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Some people say that in this modern era, it is unnecessary to teach children about the skills of handwriting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that the way of learning has become totally changed.
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, it is necessary to teach the conventional skills of handwriting
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 the computerized method. I
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 agree with the given statement that children should be familiar with handwriting skills as it is an
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 part of learning. On the one hand,
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no doubt
 with the advancement in technology there
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 no need to submit handwritten assignments or notebooks as they are replaced by computers or laptops.
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, making notes on electronic gadgets is super fast and less likely to make errors.
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 to
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 of collecting
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 of handwritten
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 children can simply save their documents in
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 or
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.
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 typing on computers
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 less time
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the art of handwriting can not be neglected. Handwriting holds
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great significance in terms of learning a language at
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 of life. To demonstrate it
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, a child of approximately 2 years of age can not
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 sit in front of time, he or she will start
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scribing or painting,
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 learn how to hold the pencil and pens.
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things more effectively with the help of writing. It not only
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 sharpen the memory but
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 to broaden the creativity. In conclusion, there is no iota of doubt the way of conventional method cannot be fully replaced by the modern ones.
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the importance of handwriting can not be fully neglected.

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Provide more specific examples to support your main points and enhance clarity.
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Ensure spelling and grammatical errors are minimized, as they can distract from your arguments.
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The introduction presents a clear stance on the topic, which is crucial for task achievement.
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You made a good attempt to explore both sides of the argument, which adds depth to your essay.
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