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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides key information about
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of people
owned
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who owned
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 hoses and rented
in
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them in
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 two countries
from
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over
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period
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a period
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 of time of almost 100
years
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. The units are measured in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
number
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a number
the number
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 of rented
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household
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households
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 was the highest from
start
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the start
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 of the period and was the lowest in
end
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the end
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.
In addition
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, the
per
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percentage
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cent
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 of rented
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household
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households
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 dropped significantly over the
years
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,
whereas
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 the owned
home
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homes
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was
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apply
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increased.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1918 rented
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household
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households
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 was the highest by almost 89 per
cent
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while
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,
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apply
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 the owned
was
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were
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 the lowest
by
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at
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 21 per
cent
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 .Over the next 50
years
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 the
percentage
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 of rented decreased but
still
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was still
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 higher than the owned
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household
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households
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that
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apply
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has increased slightly. In 1917, rented and owned
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household
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households
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share
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shared
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 the same
per
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percentage
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cent
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 at 50%. In terms of the next 30
years
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 from 1981 until 2011 the owned
household
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 take over the
percentage
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. In 2001, the owned
record
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recorded
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 the largest
per
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percentage
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cent
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by
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of
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 almost 69
in contrast
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, the rented
household
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record
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recorded
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 the lowest number by 30%.
in
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In
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 2011, the rented
household
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 number
has
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apply
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slightly
increase
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increased
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 and
reach
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reached
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 nearly 48% .

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, years, household, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • owner-occupied
  • accommodation
  • households
  • percentage
  • sozio-economic factors
  • post-World War I
  • housing policies
  • economic challenges
  • affordability
  • societal norms
  • mortgage availability
  • economic prosperity
  • reversal
  • property prices
  • younger generations
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