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The chart below shows information about students studying six main subjects at a US university in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about students studying six main subjects at a US university in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart displays information about students studying six main subjects at a US university in 2010. In
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report
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 I will summarise the information
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 the subjects at a US university in 2010 for both
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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. By looking at the provided data, finance is the most equal subject between
female
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 and
male
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males
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,
comprison
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comparison
 all the subjects on the chart, it shows they
where
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 above 200. Comes after, accounting, as it shows that the
female
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females
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where
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were
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 higher than
male
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males
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. To be more
detaild
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detailed
, among mathematics and
econemics
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economics
, the chart
appeared
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 that the
male
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males
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where
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were
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 higher than
female
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females
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. About the marketing,
female
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females
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gose
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go
 more than
male
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males
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. And when it comes to engineering there is no
sush
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such
 different between them.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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