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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables depict the total amount of Fairtrade-labelled
sales
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 of coffee and bananas in four nations in 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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, the UK recorded a significant growth in the
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 of both categories.
On the other hand
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, Switzerland was the only country where coffee
sales
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 decreased,
while
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 Sweden showed the largest drop in banana
sales
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. Coffee
sales
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 in the UK were 1.5
million
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euros
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 in 1999 and rose sharply to 20
million
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euros
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 in 2004, representing the steepest increase among all countries.
This
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 upward trend was observed in other countries as well, with Sweden showing the smallest progress, rising slightly from 0.8 to 1
million
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euros
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.
Similarly
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, in bananas
sales
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, the UK not only showed the most significant growth, from 15 to 47
million
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euros
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,
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 but
also
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 recorded the majority of
sales
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 each year.
Although
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 Sweden had the second highest
sales
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 after the United Kingdom, with 2
million
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euros
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 in 1999, its figure fell marginally and became the lowest by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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