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The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia 🇦🇺 from three countries in 1995 and 2005, and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia 🇦🇺 from three countries in 1995 and 2005, and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
illustates
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illustrates
 the
number
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 of tourists to
austerkia
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Australia
 from three countries in 1995 and 2005 and the types of
travels
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travel
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 between 1995 and 2005. The first bar graph shows the
cahge
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change
 of income
turists
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tourists
 in bars from zero to 1600000 . In 1995 60000
people
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 from the
UK
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 came to Australia as compared to 2005
where
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when
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aproximinatly
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approximately
 1500000
milion
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million
people
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areved
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arrived
 from the
UK
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. Moving to the US in 1995 where the income is way smaller than the
UK
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 and
Jappen
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Japan
,
hovever
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however
 the
sutation
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situation
station
 in 2005
signifficantly
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significantly
significant
differnt
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different
 the
number
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 of
erivels
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drivers
 is huge .
The
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 US in 2005
has
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got probably the same
number
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 of
people
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lefet
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left
 their countries and the
satistic
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statistics
statistic
 say that the
number
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 was 1500000 million. Japan in 1995 had
huge
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a huge
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number
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 of
poprple
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people
 left as compared to the
UK
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 and the US , Which is 1500000 million .
On the other
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hand
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 Japan is the only
one
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apply
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country where the
number
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 of
pepole
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people
 in 2005 who left the country
is
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apply
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decreased. The second graph gives
as
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apply
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a
colleration
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comparison
 between years and
people
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hwo
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who
 left the
counrty
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country
 they moved
in
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into
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 over
years
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the years
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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