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+ 5mins Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a univer¬sity should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own know¬ledge or experience.

Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the purposes that
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, whether they should mainly provide job-related
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 or pure knowledge to graduates has caused heated debate. My view is that practical
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 should be the main focus of
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.
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it is clear that
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 for most students, the purpose of receiving
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 education is to obtain specific knowledge and
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, which will enable them to become qualified employees in the future job market.
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 is because most of them, after graduation, will enter the workplace, earn their living, and raise their own families. So,
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, as service providers, have to give top priority to these customers’ real needs.
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, focusing on
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job-related
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 can benefit the
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 itself.
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, the science fiction blockbuster “Avatar” has marked a milestone in the filmmaking industry and sparked massive interest in 3-D technology. If a
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 can quickly respond and consolidate teaching resources to offer courses regarding 3-D, not only will its graduates be more competitive in the near future, but the
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 itself will keep pace with
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modern technological development and move forward.
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 not to say that
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 should not pay any attention to pure scientific research. There are, of course, students interested in theoretical knowledge
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 as math and philosophy, and they will later become scientists and scholars who will make greater contributions to our society. But unfortunately, these people are few. In sum, the major function of
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 should be providing students with job-related
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, guaranteeing
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 rate of employment, and
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 making the society function well. Meanwhile, we should not ignore the other important roles
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 are undertak¬ing. Only by doing so can
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 maintain dynamic and sustainable development. (290 words)

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task achievement
Your essay clearly states your opinion, but make sure to fully explain your ideas and support them with more examples or details.
coherence
Your paragraphs are organized well, but try to use more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.
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You could include more specific examples of job-related skills or courses that universities might offer to strengthen your argument.
coherence
Your introduction presents the topic clearly and states your opinion strongly.
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You provide a strong argument for the importance of job-related skills in your first example.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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