Some people believe that time spent on television and computer games can valuable for children. Other believe this has negative impact on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that television and video games have
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children
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skills, there is
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an argument that children are wasting their time with it.
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essay will analyse
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
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can be so helpful
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the kid know how to use it.
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, nowadays, businesses are
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giving a lot
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the players that are pros in the game so they can take it to be professional and go to join clubs.
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, games develop many soft skills and
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solve
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is how parents know what to teach their kids.
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, if people do not know how to use the internet or any other technology they will be addicted to it. It is possible to say that social media wants to let their users
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be on the platform as long as possible to get your attention with
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process kids will waste their time and not get what they want from it.
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, it
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damage the kid with what
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it.
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, porn is the most
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in 2020 and most of the age percentage was the young generation. in conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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tend to believe that kids need to use
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technology so they can improve and be with wave in the
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future
that will make them trust
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but parents need to keep an eye on them so
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know what they are doing .

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