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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

The line chart illustrates data about the relationship between
minutes
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 elapsed after eating three specific types of sweet ingredients and the amount of oral
acid
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. In general, sugary foods increase acidity levels in the mouth within 5
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.
Afterward
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, the
acid
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level
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 gradually decreases, with different rates of change depending on the type of food consumed.
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, after 5
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 of eating something sweet, the
acid
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 in the mouth increased. The pH
level
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 gradually increased as time passed. Cane
sugar
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 had the most significant pH
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 compared to the other two. The
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level
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 peaked around 3.5 after 5
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 had elapsed. It was followed by fruit
sugar
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 and honey, with nearly 4 and below 5. respectively. After 35
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, the mouth's acidity reached a pH balance. Honey-containing food was the fastest type to reach a balanced
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. The second category was fruit
sugar
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,
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 the
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 was cane
sugar
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.
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behavior
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 was upside down with the
level
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 of
acid
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 in the food.

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Make sure to include an introduction that summarizes the main points of the chart clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and make the flow of the essay better.
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Provide more details on how the pH levels change over time for each sweet to enhance understanding.
task achievement
You provided clear data about the pH levels of the different sweet ingredients.

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