You have recently ordered an item through the Internet, but are not happy with the purchase. Write to the company. In your letter: – Describe what you purchased, – explain why you are not happy with the purchase, – tell them what you would like them to do about the situation.

Dear Customer Service Department, I am writing to express my
dissatisfactory
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dissatisfaction
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about
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with
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a
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an
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online purchasing experience
last
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week with your company.
On
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last
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wednesday
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Wednesday
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, I ordered a pair of
delicated
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delicate
glass
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scuplture
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sculpture
through your website. After the completion,
a
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the
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statement 'your products will arrive within 3 days' was shown on my computer screen.
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, I just received my
good
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goods
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this
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Monday.
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, I opened the delivery box
wtih excitment
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with excitement
but I found that my
glass
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scuplture
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sculpture
was broken. I
look
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around the delivery box and there were no stickers on the box showing the products
are
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fragile.
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, the protection for the
glass
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scuplture
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sculpture
sculptures
seemed vulnerable and did not
absord
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absorb
any
crashs
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crashes
crash
well. I am not asking for the extra compensation, but please send me another brand new
glass
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scuplture
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sculpture
with enough protection.
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, I might seek
for
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apply
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assistance from
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the Coustomer
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Coustomer
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Customer
Council. Thank you for your kind attention, your
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action is appreciated. Yours Sincerely, Cheng Yat Hin

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task achievement
Make sure to check spelling and grammar before sending. Correct words like 'dissatisfactory' to 'dissatisfaction' and 'delicated' to 'delicate'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your letter more clearly. You can use simple paragraphs to separate the order details, the problem, and your request.
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Ensure that your response remains polite and professional. Use phrases like 'I would appreciate your assistance' instead of threats like seeking help from a council.
task achievement
You clearly explained what you purchased, which helps the company understand your issue.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter followed a good structure, making it easy to read.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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