The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
provide
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provided
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figure
compare
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compares
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that
Correct determiner usage
the
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variation
the
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of the
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pupils
age
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aged
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between 11 years to 16 who use ways to travel to
school
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there
is
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are
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various types of public transportation
in
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apply
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such
Linking Words
as
bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
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, cars, bicycles and walke.
Overall
Linking Words
the pupils who
is walking
Wrong verb form
walked
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less than one
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miles
Fix the agreement mistake
mile
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to travel to
school
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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high was 90
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percentage
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per cent
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.
while
Linking Words
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
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is walking
Wrong verb form
walked
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more than one
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miles
Fix the agreement mistake
mile
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to 2
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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60
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percentage
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per cent
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.
According to
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what
shown
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is shown
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in
bar
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the bar
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chart it's illustrated the pupils who use the bicycle more than 1-2
miles
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to go to
school
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was 73
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percentage
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per cent
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.
In addition
Linking Words
the
students
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who go to
school
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by bus the distance was more than 5
miles
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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68
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percentage
Replace the word
per cent
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. The
Use synonyms
students
Correct quantifier usage
number of students
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who used
the
Correct article usage
apply
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cars to travel to
school
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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the lowest.
To sum
Linking Words
up
Add a comma
up,
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the
students
Use synonyms
who
traveled
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travelled
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to
school
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the
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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high
percentage
Use synonyms
was 90
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percentage
Replace the word
per cent
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.
while
Linking Words
the
students
Use synonyms
who travelled to education class by
cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, miles, percentage, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modes of transportation
  • Percentage
  • Comparative analysis
  • Seasonal variations
  • External factors
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Non-motorized modes
  • Safety
  • Convenience
  • Sustainable
  • Initiatives
  • Promoting
  • Improvements
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