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Economic growth is the best way of ending global poverty but it can also have a negative effect on the environment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
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 day and age, the poverty level has been increased significantly around the world.
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, to fight
this
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 global dilemma, all the world leaders have to come together to rapid
the
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economic growth with a cautious plan to avoid negative
impact
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impacts
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 on the environment.
This
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 essay will discuss both
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views and will provide personal opinions.
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 with, many countries around the world
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 hurtling toward bankruptcy,
in
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result
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more
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 poor people. To fix
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 issue worldwide, economic growth is the only option
remains
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.
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, to decrease
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poverty, countries
requires
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 more
,
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 and more industries and factories. As a
results
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, it will develop employment and businesses in different sectors.
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,
this
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 whole chain will provide good food to poor children
also
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 a better healthcare to society,
in
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addition
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 it will cut down all the housing
crisis
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,
therefore
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,
poverty
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the poverty
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 level will go down with
stable
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a stable
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 economy.
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, everything comes with a cost and huge
causes
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costs
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 in some cases.
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, the industries and factories
requries
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requires
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 huge lands
in
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outskirts
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the outskirts
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 which will harm
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nature by cutting down thousands of trees, pushing the wildlife by decreasing their land to produce chemicals and hundreds of harmful products which will impact
environment
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the environment
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as well as
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 natural habitats.
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, the government and industrialists should work together to deal with these issues and come to
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 solution where economic growth should not come
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a
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 way of
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nature.

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coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and stick to it. For example, clarify how economic growth directly helps to reduce poverty.
cohesion
Use linking words like 'however' and 'for example' to make connections between your ideas more clearly.
task achievement
Provide specific examples of countries or programs that have successfully reduced poverty through economic growth.
language
Check grammar and verb agreement, like using 'countries are' instead of 'countries is'.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your discussion.
content
You present both sides of the argument about economic growth and environmental impact, showing a balanced view.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Global poverty
  • Employment opportunities
  • Industries
  • Welfare programs
  • Infrastructure development
  • Technological advancements
  • Productivity
  • Environmental degradation
  • Deforestation
  • Pollution
  • Natural resources
  • GDP growth
  • Sustainability
  • Sustainable development
  • Environmental protection
  • Long-term impacts
  • Integrated policies
  • Green technologies
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