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Writing Samples
Band 1

In past people feel difference in foreign culture. Nowadays, this situation is changed. What are the causes for this changes? Do Advantage outweigh disadvantages?

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past
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 more and more
people
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feel
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felt
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difference
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the difference
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 when they
travel
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travelled
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 to
other country
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another country
other countries
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,
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apply
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because they
faces
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face
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 different
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culture
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cultures
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while
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 nowadays,most
people
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 feel comfortable and happy to know more about the
foregin
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foreign
culture
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. There are many causes
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that leads
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leads
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lead
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people
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feel
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to feel
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 more
saticfay
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satisfied
 even if they are in
different
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a different
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 country with a different
culture
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.In fact,
the
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apply
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social media nowadays
one
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is one
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 of the biggest
thing
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things
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 which can
changes
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the
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apply
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feeling
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feelings
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.What
i
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I
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 mean, through social media
people
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 can learn many things about the place where
thwy
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they
 will travel to.A study published
on
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in
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 New York
university
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University
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coucluded
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concluded
that 90% of those who use social media to get information about other cultures are more suitable to face other
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culture
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cultures
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.

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task response
Make sure to clearly express your main idea in the introduction. A strong thesis statement helps the reader understand your argument better.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas, such as 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally', to improve the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Try to include a conclusion that summarizes your points and restates your main idea, giving a clear ending to your essay.
task response
You have a good starting point by discussing social media's role in understanding other cultures.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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