The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.

The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.
The bar chart gives information about the percentage of Australians aged over 15 doing physical activity on a regular basis between 2011 and 2012, broken down by gender.
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the highest proportions of women doing exercises were at the age of 25 to 64,
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for men at the same age, the proportions were lowest.
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, females were more active throughout the period, except for people between 15 and 24. Focusing first on Australians aged between 25 and 64, approximately 1 in 2 women did regular physical activity regularly,
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men, the corresponding figure was from around 40 to 45 per cent. As for the remaining age groups, almost 53% and 48% of males and females between the ages of 15
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. Regarding those over 65, the proportion of both sexes was nearly the same, at roughly 47% throughout the period.

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