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Writing Samples
Band 3

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is sometimes argued that saving
money
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 for our
future
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 life is crucial for everyone contain young people. I completely agree
that
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 importance and believe that the
benift
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benefit
benefits
 of saving
money
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 outweigh the drawbacks. Critics argued that
reduce
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 spending will make most of
peoples
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presure
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pressure
 increase. They can’t enjoy the expensive food or luxury which they like the other point is saving
money
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 will lower our life quality. Any decorations in our house will be simple and the cheapest one. It may reduce the motivation of people
rest
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 at home to increase exhaustion-related diseases. As for me, saving
money
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 for
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future
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the future
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 will ensure my
future
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 life. Most
of
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people with no
abilities
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 to earn
money
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 in their old
ages
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, because
of
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the
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apply
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companies in
today
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today's
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 markets need young blood
leader
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leaders
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in
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company
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Companies
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 usually choose
the
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 person who just graduated.
Also
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, saving
money
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 for
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future
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 is
for giving
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to give
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 my
future
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 child
better
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a better
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 living quality. If one day I have
child
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a child
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, I need to prepare the
money
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 for her to study or
entertainment
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 even about give her
best
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the best
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 living environment. In conclusion,
while
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money
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-save for
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future
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the future
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 may involve stress maker or lower time to breaks, their role in fostering
out
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our
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future
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 is irreplaceable. We can not ignore the benefit
in
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of
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 saving
money
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 for
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future
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the future
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.

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion and what you will discuss in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer connections between paragraphs and ideas to improve the flow of your essay.
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Try to use more specific examples to support your points, which can make your arguments stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammar and spelling mistakes, as they can affect the clarity of your writing.
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You clearly state your agreement with the topic, which is good.
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Your examples about saving for the future are relevant to your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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