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Band 2

The best way to protect the environment is to use local resource, such as food or building materials rather than transporting resources from other places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that the way to protect the environment is to use
in
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apply
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local
resource
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resources
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.
while
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 is
its
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a
commonly
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common
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help
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held
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 belief that
safeing
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saving
 the
revelution
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revolution
revelation
 so we can use it for our life, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my
opinion
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i
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 agree that
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 better and
easy
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easier
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also
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 to get what we have
with out
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without
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 transporting.
Body · 1
To begin
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 with, using local
resource
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resources
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 can help the people to
but
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buy
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 cheaper. In
other word
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, ALain milk
its
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is
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 cheaper
moreover
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 the cafes
they
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apply
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also
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 can
but
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buy
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 huge
quantity
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quantities
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.
In addition
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, all different
age
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ages
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 can use the product in the store.
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, my sister
she buy
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a
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an
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yougert
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 because
its
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it's
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also
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 cheap only 2.50
dhe
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the
.
Body · 2
Another point to consider, transporting
resoures thes
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resources these
 days
are
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is
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 really
expinsive
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expensive
. it is
also
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prssible
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possible
 to say that every country
count
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counts
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 the
transporting
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transport
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 with tax and shipping
cost
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costs
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.
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, in 2025 tax increase
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then
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than
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 before.
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, in Abu Dhabi
thay
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they
 just
add
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added
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 5% in the
pas
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past
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 we
didnt
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didn't
 have
tax
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the tax
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 amount.
Conclusion
In conclusion, despite people having
differet
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different
 views,
i
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I
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 believe that
safe
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saving
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 the environment
its
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apply
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enhsnce
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enhances
 the
econme
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economy
.

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task response
Your introduction needs to clearly state your opinion in a stronger way and make sure to introduce both sides of the argument. This will help the reader understand your main point right away.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the structure of your paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and supporting details. Try to group related ideas together in a clearer way.
task response
Make sure to provide more specific examples that are relevant to your points. For instance, while you mentioned cheaper local resources, you could explain how that benefits both the economy and the environment in a stronger way.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid spelling mistakes and errors in word forms. This will make your writing clearer. For example, 'revelution' should be 'revolution', and 'dhe' should be 'she'. Taking time to proofread your work can help avoid these issues.
content
You are discussing an important topic and expressing your opinion, which is a good start!
content
You make some valid points about local resources being cheaper and the costs of transporting goods.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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