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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about ths?

Nowadays, many individuals argue that it is mandatory to keep your home and your
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 office clean,
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 everything
well
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 organized and
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in
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 its proper position.
This
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 essay intends to talk about both perspectives before presenting my point of view. On one hand, many individuals argue that it is mandatory to keep your
work
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 environment clean and shiny after using the devices.
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, working in organizations with various team members
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you should always reflect the positive side of your own personality, which will lead to a final evaluation from both HR and the manager. so, it's one of the essential
work
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 rules every worker should know before signing any contract with a job provider.
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, maintaining the environment
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clean will reduce pollution effects and raise awareness of his vital habits around society.
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, organizing items in their proper places
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has
positive
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 impact on physical, emotional, and cognitive development among other employees in the
work
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 area.
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, organizing items in the
work
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 office could help in researching
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lost items very fast and
by
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 an easier way without any effort.
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, organizing could lead to an increase in productivity, especially
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 those who
work
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 for a long time in front of screens.
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, well well-organized office plays an active role
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, encourages better results.
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, maintaining
workplace
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 and home clean and shiny has definitely positive effect
at
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work
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 environment. I firmly believe cleaning must be taught from an early age

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coherence
Make the introduction clearer by stating your opinion right away.
coherence
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Shows a good understanding of the topic and presents both sides.
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Makes relevant points about cleanliness affecting productivity.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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