Some people believe that it is more common way to learn history by watching movies instead of reading books. Does the advantages of this ought weight the disadvantages?

There are many ways to learn
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. Some
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think
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adapted from
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in probing the real story behind
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. Some
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think historical
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a more accurate perspective of learning
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. In my own opinion, I think we'd better learn
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from
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rather than from
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. Here are my reasons: First and foremost, historical
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may prioritize entertainment over historical accuracy, leading to potential misconceptions or a biased view of events. Some
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may argue,
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historical
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movie is adapted from real
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, it tells the truth to some extent.
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argument does not validate the reason for learning
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from
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. Young children may naively think what they see in
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happened in the past
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if the adults do not provide appropriate guidance. The plot in the
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may be deliberately twisted to
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a comical effect. If it strictly
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the real
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, the movie will bore the audience to death.
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movies
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often simplify complex historical events and contexts to fit within a limited runtime, which can result in an incomplete understanding. Compared with the simple plot and the black-and-white narrative as presented in the movie, real
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is more complicated than
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imagined. Fitting an event of hundreds of years into
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may simply prove impossible. Scriptwriters often leave out the details to keep the story short.
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unlike
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, which can delve deeply into historical nuances,
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typically offer a more superficial overview, potentially leaving out important details and varying perspectives. Most
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often feature one or two main characters and tell the story from the main
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perspective. It lacks the depth of historical
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as detailed by peer-reviewed research and historical
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. In conclusion, I think learning
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from
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is better than from
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because book approaches
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from more perspectives. It offers
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interesting
insights and delves into historical nuances that cannot be fitted into
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • engagement
  • relatable
  • accessibility
  • inclusive
  • vivid visuals
  • dramatic storytelling
  • visual and emotional experience
  • historical accuracy
  • potential misconceptions
  • biased view
  • simplification
  • complex historical events
  • limited runtime
  • incomplete understanding
  • historical nuances
  • superficial overview
  • varying perspectives
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