The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (line graph)

The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (line graph)
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (line graph)
The chart line above shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices (MP3
player
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, Mobile
phone
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,
Computer
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and Tablet)
ftom
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from
1995 to 2015. In
this
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report
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report,
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I will Summarize the information below. By looking at the provided data, Mobile
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phone
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phones
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and
Computer
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aer
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are
the top two in
all
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apply
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the line graph.
Firstly
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, MP3
player
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, it starts between 10% and 20% in 1995,
then
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it
gose
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goes
up to only 40% in 2015.
Secondly
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, Mobile
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phone
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phones
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where
starts
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started
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around
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at around
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7%
since
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in
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1995 and appeared too high (
among
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between
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90% and 100%) in 2015.
Although
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,
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the computer
Computer
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range where not that different from
Mobile
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the Mobile
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phone
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data, as we can see it shows that they
stats
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start
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and
ends
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end
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from
same
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the same
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percentage (from 7% to 90% or 100%).
While
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, the Tablet
start
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starts
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from
different
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a different
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date, reverse from MP3
player
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, Mobile
phone
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, and
Computer
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, it starts between 2000 to 2005, and it stops at 80%
at
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in
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2015.
Overall
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, the MP3
player
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where lowest range
from
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of
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all
the
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apply
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types of electronic devices,
while
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Mobile
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phone
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phones
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and
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Computer
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computers
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shows
Wrong verb form
showed
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the
highst
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highest
range of all
the
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apply
show examples
types of electronic devices.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mp, player, phone, computer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • ownership percentages
  • electronic devices
  • 20-year period
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • detailed comparison
  • highest ownership rates
  • dramatic changes
  • potential reasons
  • trends
  • shifts
  • insights
  • implications
  • future device ownership patterns
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