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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 a topic of debate in recent years.
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 some people argue
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 believe that the
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 at school.
This
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,
children
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's
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can
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thier
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their
teacher
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 the subject. So it could be a
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 of
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therefore
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teacher
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teachers
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give
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 their pupils per
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paperworks
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paperwork
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:giving
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paperwork
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a child
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child
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children
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 to study hard every
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thier
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their
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mentals
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mental
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, the
teacher
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 is effective in the
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 my perspective ,
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teacher
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will
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strength
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strengths
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 and
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weaknesses
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 of
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 can teachers help the students when they have some Lower
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 to sharpen their knowledge and skills
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On the other hand
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 , those who oppose
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 their
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 rather than
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improver
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thier
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their
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who have
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 spent a long period of time in their schools
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afterwards
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 when kids have
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 every single
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they
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after
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day
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concentrations
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, might
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not help them with
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 of studying and
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their
the
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the
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others
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 are convinced that
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 some difficulties
to
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 balancing their learning and their life.

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coherence and cohesion
Your sentences sometimes confuse the reader. Make sure each sentence is clear and connects well to the main idea.
task achievement
Try to use more specific examples and explain your ideas clearly. This will help the reader understand your opinion better.
task achievement
You provided arguments for both sides of the homework debate, showing an understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your essay is present with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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