You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

Dear sir/madam I am writing
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letter to request for accommodation and
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want a new
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next term. I am unable to focus on my studies because of my
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roommate
as her friends keep visiting our
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and have parties all the time. whenever
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enter my
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,
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see that they all are hanging around without telling me.
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am not
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person and
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spend most of my time
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. because of
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have to go to
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or park to complete my college work. I discussed
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issue with her several times and requested her to stop it but she always
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me and
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doing the same thing.
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, sometimes her friends
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take my things without even asking me.
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have been facing these problems from
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term. now,
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am requesting you to give me a new
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single
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so,
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can easily focus on my studies I hope you will understand my situation and will take action promptly.
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faithfully sahajpreet
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea. This will help you to be clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas better. Start with your main point and support it.
task achievement
Use a more polite tone in your request. This could help your letter.
task achievement
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. This helps make your letter easy to read.
task achievement
Your letter has a clear purpose, which is to request a new room.
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You explained your reasons well, which helps the reader understand your situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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