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Band 4.5

In the future all cars , buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disaadvantages?

It is undeniable true that , with the advancement of technology all the
vehicless
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vehicles
 will be
driverless
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 in
coming
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 future.
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, there
wil
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will
 be only commuters who will
travelling
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 inside the
cars
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, buses and trucks. I believe that it will be more effective than the
automoboiles
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automobiles
automobile
 driven by
drivers
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. One significant advantage of having
driverless
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vehicles
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,will be no chances of accidents,
no
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and no
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 reliability
on
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drivers
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 as the rates of road
accident
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 is considerably high these days.
This
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due to
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 the
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 of
drivers
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 because sometimes they are using their phones and there is a lack of focus
while
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 driving,
it
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 becomes the cause of serious, injuries or even death of pedestrians.
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, as
an automobiles
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automobiles
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 will be driven by AI
then
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 there will
also
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 be the
flexibilty
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flexibility
 of
vehicles
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 which will be more accurate ,
reliable
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and reliable
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 . To cite an example , there are Tesla
cars
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 which are fully monitored by
the
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apply
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AI
.which
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which
 are
more
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faster than the
cars
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 driven by
drivers
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.
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driverless
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 automobiles will be designed to ease the common people.
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, it is going
be
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 a big loss for all the
drivers
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 because they will
be lost
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 their jobs if
vehicles
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will be
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are
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 replaced by automated ones. Driving is a skill and it is a source of income for many people, in a way it will
hard
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 for them to earn bread and butter for their families and
this
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 will indirectly
leads
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 to the rise of unemployment. To recapitulate, I believe having automated
vehicles
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 will be advantageous
although
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 its demerits cannot be overlooked. with the help of
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goverment
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government
, those
drivers
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 can be
assignes
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assigned
 to other sectors of employment. Eventually,
driverless
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cars
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 will restricted to the traffic rules and
regulation
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regulations
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 and there will be no threat of road accidents.

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You provided a clear opinion on the topic and gave some reasons to support it. This is an important aspect of essay writing.
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The essay presents both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, showing a balanced view on the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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