Question:more students study abroad to learn new things today do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? is it positive or negative? agree or disagree to what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that the number of students
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study abroad today is greater than before.
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it is a commonly held
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belief that
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is a positive thing
due to
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many things, there is
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an argument that it is
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negativity
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sides are more than the positive ones.
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, studying abroad could be
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beneficial
in many ways.
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studying abroad gives the person new
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experience
and a lot of
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.
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,
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who lives alone will spend a well amount of time
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lonely
and
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might be a
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if it is used correctly.
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new university study found that a student who
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alone and
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all the home tasks himself
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better grades than others.
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, being alone in
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forgin
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own negative aspects. It is possible to say that someone
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used to stay with his or her friends and family may find it hard to stay by him or
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for
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time.
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some people did not have tried to take care of
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themselves
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which is an essential thing if you want to study abroad. For
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instance
, anyone who can not
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handle
the
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difficulty
of
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living
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home with the full
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responsibility
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everything
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of taking care of the food or any other things. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
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question. In balance,
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, I tend to
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believe
that studying abroad is a
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wonderful
adventure for
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can take care of the different
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of hard problems because it will give the
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ability
to deal with many live
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experience
experiences
and will have
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his
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own personality, otherways I can not say I
recommonded
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recommend
recommended
studying abroad.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion. This helps the reader understand your position better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer linking words to connect your ideas (e.g., 'firstly', 'on the other hand', 'in conclusion'). This will help the flow of your essay.
language
Be careful with spelling and grammar errors. For example, 'benifital' should be 'beneficial', and 'experince' should be 'experience'.
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Use more specific examples to support your arguments. This can make your points stronger and more convincing.
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You have good ideas about the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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