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The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides key information about
cinema
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attendance
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 in the United Kingdom among different
age
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groups
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, based on research by a university lecturer.
Overall
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,
while
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 each of the four
age
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groups
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 showed slightly different patterns over the given period, all experienced a general upward trend in
cinema
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attendance
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.
However
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, the rate of increase varied, with some
age
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groups
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 growing more rapidly than others. In 1990, the 14–24 and 25–34
age
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groups
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 started at around 18% and just over 28%, respectively. Both
groups
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 saw a gradual decline between 1995 and 2000. After that,
cinema
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attendance
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 rose significantly for these two
age
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groups
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, continuing an upward trajectory until 2010.
In contrast
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,
cinema
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attendance
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 among the 35–44 and 45–54
age
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groups
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 began higher.
For instance
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, in 1990,
attendance
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 for the 45–54 group was approximately 38%, increasing slightly to nearly 40% by 1995.
However
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, the 35–44
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 group saw a slight decline to around 37% in the same period. From 2000 to 2010, both the 35–44 and 45–54
age
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groups
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 experienced a noticeable and steady increase in
cinema
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attendance
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, showing that all
age
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groups
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 became more engaged.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, attendance, age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • anomaly
  • trend
  • pattern
  • attendance
  • cinema-goers
  • audience
  • peak
  • decline
  • increment
  • fluctuation
  • baseline
  • societal changes
  • technological advancements
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • home entertainment
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