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Band 4.5

a friend as written to you asking for advice about the problem at work . You have had a similar problem in the past write a reply to your friend in your letter You untderstand the problem Explain what happened with you in the past Suggest possible solutions about the problem

Dear Dianne, Hope you are doing well, I received
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 letter about the situation you are facing at
workplace
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the workplace
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 and having difficulties with your team. I understand am not able to resolve
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 issue, but
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 will try to give you proper guidance. I understand
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 is very
frausting
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frustrating
 when you face
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 situation at your workplace as it demotivates the person to concentrate on work as well it makes your work environment uncomfortable. Since I read
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 letter, I want to tell you that
i
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 was in the same situation
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 months ago. I
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 had a conflict with my team as we were working on
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 important project, but they
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 not ready to take my ideas
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 consideration which
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 me left out
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 the team. From my experience, I want to suggest
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apply
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that you should try to
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on one
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one-on-one
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 conversations or
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 open meetings so you can speak freely and
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 your opinions. I believe when you do
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 your colleagues will listen and value your opinions. Hope my advice will work for you. With warm regards, Shivani.

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task achievement
Make sure to include all parts of the task clearly. For example, explain your friend's problem more.
coherence and cohesion
Try to arrange your ideas better. Each paragraph should focus on one clear point.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear openings and closings for paragraphs to guide the reader.
task achievement
You show understanding and relate your own experience, which is good.
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Your tone is friendly and supportive, which fits the letter format well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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