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The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015. (million students) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015. (million students) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provides key data about the average number of Vietnamese
students
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 studying in three countries between the years 2000 and 2015. The units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that America had the largest number of
students
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 in 2015.
In addition
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, high schoolers from Russia their line pattern did not change notably over the years,
whereas
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, France, had the lowest number of
students
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. decreased
According to
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 what is shown in the year 2000, Russia had around 3
million
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students
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 , during 2000, it decreased to nearly 2.2
million
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, and gradually increased in 2015, to 2.4
million
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.
On the other hand
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, the US had the least amount in 2000, with 1.4
million
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 , increasing to 2.1
million
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 in the year 2005, and it reached 5
million
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 teenagers in 2015. In terms of France, in 2000, it was significantly high almost 3.3
million
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.
However
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, in 2005, it went down by 2.5
million
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, and in 2015, it went up to 4.4
million
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students
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • Vietnamese students
  • studying abroad
  • steady increase
  • significant growth
  • comparatively
  • percentage increase
  • gap
  • narrowed
  • chosen to study
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