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Writing Samples
Band 4

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no denying the fact that
humens
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humans
 will be reading online more than reading from printed news.
While
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 it is commonly held belief people will read fewer from printed
newspapers
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this
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 is happening
due to
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 the
advansement
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advancement
 of technology, there is
also
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 an argument that
oppses
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opposes
 it. In my opinion, I consider that it is true and I
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 it
comppletly
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completely
 reasonable.
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 with,
this
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 is going to be the the state in the future because it is easier to find the news that you are looking for if it is on an
onlline
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online
 web or an application.
In other words
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, getting the information you want from an easy to
optain
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obtain
sorece
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source
 is really important and can be beneficial.
In addition
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, when it is easy to find what you want
this
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 will cause a
disire
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desire
 to read more.
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 when I want to look at an old printed newspaper I should search
to
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for
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 it
from
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in
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 stores or so,
however
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 if it is
on
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apply
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online
this
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 will be much more
atainable
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accessible
. Another point to consider,
how
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is how
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 much money we will save as a
comminity
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community
. It is possible to say that
this
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 is a positive state because people will spend their money on other
thing
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things
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 and these things might be much more important than buying
a printed
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printed newspapers
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newspapers
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.
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, when we do not print much newspaper
this
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mean
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means
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 we need to cut a smaller amount of trees.
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, a new university study found that
tranceforming
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transforming
 from
printed based
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printed-based
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 to
online based
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online-based
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newspapers
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 will cause
40
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a 40
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% decrease in the amount of cutied trees. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, despite people
haveing
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having
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 different views, I believe that
this
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 will
happend
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happen
 in the near future,
therefore
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 we must be ready for it and have the
needs
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need
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 to make it a beneficial development
also
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 another supportive thing would be if these online
newspapers
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 with a small
supscribtion
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subscription
 price to help the bussnismans who work in
this
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 field.

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task achievement
Make sure to present clear reasons for your opinion.
coherence
Use simple linking words to connect your ideas, like 'first', 'next', and 'finally'.
coherence
Check spelling and grammar to make your writing clearer, for example, 'humans' instead of 'humens', and 'advance' instead of 'advanse'.
task achievement
Always support each point with clear examples or explanation.
task achievement
You have given your opinion clearly right from the start.
task achievement
You made good points about saving money and trees.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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