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Band 3

All education, primarily secondary, and further education should be free to all people and paid for buying the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that all levels of
education
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 from primary
throughout
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to
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 higher
education
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 should be accessible to everyone at no cost and funded by the government.
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disagree
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 with
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 statement because free
education
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 can lead to overcrowding and a variety of financial problems for the authorities.
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 ,
publicly
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 funded
education
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 system, in fact, leads to overcrowded classrooms and inefficient
education
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 materials. The main reason for
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believe
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that
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 students from diverse backgrounds will be offered
education
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with
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at
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 no cost,
could
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 result in overcrowded schools and excessive use of public services and classroom space.
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, a study in India found that
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education
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 significantly increased the shortage of basic sources like desk chairs.
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 , publicly funded
education
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, might place a heavy economic burden and challenges for the state. An increase in student numbers requires a considerable amount of educational resources, and materials, which can place financial pressure on
government
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.
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, providing free schooling might lead to an
oversatration
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oversaturation
 of degree holders without job opportunities. For
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instant
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 it could value degrees and lead to high unemployment rates among graduates. In conclusion,
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 free
education
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 might seem beneficial, it can lead to several negative consequences.
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, I believe that a paid
education
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 system is better for both the government and its citizens.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socioeconomic background
  • meritocracy
  • social equity
  • highly-skilled workforce
  • economic growth
  • financial strain
  • budget allocation
  • overcrowded classrooms
  • educational materials
  • specialized fields
  • tuition costs
  • oversaturation
  • degree holders
  • job opportunities
  • graduate unemployment
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