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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants, for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants, for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provides key data about the various activities for the numbers of
people
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 at one social
center
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centre
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 in Melbourne, Australia
for
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apply
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between
period
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the period
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 2000 and 2020. the units are measured in
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
participants
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
film
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the film
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 club had the highest figures.
In addition
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, table tennis and Amateur dramatics were equal in 2010,
whereas
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, musical performances
was
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were
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 the lowest over the years.
According to
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 what
is
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apply
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shown in 2000, film
club
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clubs
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 had
large
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a large
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 number of
people
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 around
two-
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two-thirds
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third,
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in 2010 decreased to nearly 63, and it
remaind
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remained
remains
 constant until 2020 around 67
people
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.
However
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, for martial arts it was lower compared to films almost one-third of
participants
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 during 2000, increasing to almost 39
people
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 in 2010.
On the other hand
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, table tennis had 28
people
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 in the year 2000, decreasing to 15
participants
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 in 2010, and in 2020, it rapidly increased to almost 55
people
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. In terms of the
activitie
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activity
 the amateur dramatics, it had around 19
people
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 in 2000 and 2005,
while
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, in 2015, it had a large number of
people
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 nearly 38, and in 2020, it went up to 50
participants
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.
Finally
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, in 2005, musical performances
was
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were
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 the least amount of
people
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 with zero
participants
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, and it gradually
increaed
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increased
 until it got to 19
people
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 in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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