The table below shows the proportion of income spent on4 common items in the UK in 1998

The table below shows the proportion of income spent on4 common items in the UK in 1998
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the proportion of income spent on4 common items in the UK in 1998
The table illustrates how adults and children in the United Kingdom spent their income on four common items food, electronic
equipment
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,
music
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and videos in the year 1998.
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, adults allocated their revenue to food,
while
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children spent most of their income on
music
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and electronic
equipment
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. Adults spent 25 % of their income on food, with women allocating a higher proportion of 39%
comparing
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with men’s 14% . Both men and women spent only five
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percent
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on
music
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, but men spent slightly more on electronic
equipment
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by
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9% and videos
by
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1.5 % .
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, children’s spending habits were quite different. They spent 39% on
music
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and 23%
electronic
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on electronic
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equipment
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. Boys allocated 18% to electronics and 38% to
music
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,
while
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girls showed slightly more expense on
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music
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the music
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of
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40% but less on electronics
of
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five
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percent
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per cent
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. Videos
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took a notable account of children's spending twelve
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percent
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per cent
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overall
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, with boys spending slightly more
of
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eighteen
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percent
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per cent
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than girls’ seventeen
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words equipment, music, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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