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The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides key information about the London 2012 Olympic Games and the number of
medals
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 won by the top ten countries. The units are measured in number.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there was a tenth country in the diagram illustrating winner rank in different
medals
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.
In addition
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, the US achieved first place in gold and silver
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,
whereas
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,
Russia
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 was the highest winner in the bronze
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.
According to
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 what is shown in the figure the United States, China, and Great Britain had a top three in the gold medal. After that, we had
Russia
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 and South Korea.
Moreover
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, Germany and France attained the same number. On the other side, the US, China, and
Russia
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 represent the top 3 in the Silver medal.
Then
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, there were Germany, the UK, and Australia in the rest of the ranks. In terms of the bronze medal,
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, the US, China, and
Russia
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 on the top three.
However
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, Italy and Hungary had a lewest winners in 2012 at the Olympic Games in London.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, russia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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