Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years, people
are
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have
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arguing
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argued
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due to
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the growing amount of abortions in women. Some citizens are in favour of
legalisation
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the legalisation
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of abortion and others want to stop
this
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trend. I am in favour of
former
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the former
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viewpoint. Those who are in the favour of legalisation of ending
the
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apply
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pregnacies
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pregnancies
in the early stage believe that it should be
a
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the
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decision of
mother
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the mother
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, whether she wants to take a child or not. There might be various reasons behind
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,
sometime
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sometimes
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the
pregnacy
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pregnancy
is because of
the
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apply
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rape or
abusive
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an abusive
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relationship.
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, women may not be ready from financial or mental aspects. If in
such
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situations a baby
born
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the result could be a mental torcher for a lady and poor upbringing of
a children
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children
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.
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, In my country
india
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India
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, babies are thrown into fields and waste water when mothers are not able to end the journey of being
mother
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mothers
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. To stop
such
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situations, legalisation should be mandatory. There are few who are against
to
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apply
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legalised owing to the belief
of
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in
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killing
of
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apply
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a human being. They claim that in the first three months
a
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apply
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fatals
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fatal
internal organs start to develop.
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, abortion is
same
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the same
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like
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a
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as
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murder.
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, some cultures prohibit
this
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scenerio
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scenario
. If
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law
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the law
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force
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forces
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people to obey
this
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rule of killing, the people may start strikes.
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, these
pre-muture
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pre-mature
birth
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births
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can
also
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lead
many
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to many
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issues
such
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as poor ovulation, fibroids and weight gain. That's why, they
donot
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do not
want
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law
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the law
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to enter. In my
viewpoints
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viewpoint
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, the
law
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should enforce
such
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laws. The benefits are wider as
compare
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compared
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to
negative
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the negative
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side. It should be
a
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the
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decision of parents whether they are mentally and
phsically
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physically
ready. In conclusion, it became a debate among
notion
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notions
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whether the government should mandate the
law
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of abortion or not. There were few who were with
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law
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the law
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along with
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me owing to the consequences of
pregnacy
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pregnancy
.
Such
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laws can assist women in difficult situations when there is not a mutual decision.

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Task Achievement
Your argument about the legalisation of abortion needs clearer expression. Make sure each point is well explained.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to improve the flow between your ideas. Use linking words to connect sentences and paragraphs better.
Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
You provided specific examples to illustrate your argument, which helps support your views.
Coherence and Cohesion
You presented both sides of the debate, which shows a balanced perspective.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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