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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The maps below
illustrates
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illustrate
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 a port between
the
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apply
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2000 and today.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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,over the years
harbour
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the harbour
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 has experienced some new challenges in the passenger ferries,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 a few areas have remained the same
such
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 as both car
park
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parks
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 and showers and toilets and some
building
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buildings
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 have
replaced
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been replaced
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to
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with
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another facilities
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another facility
other facilities
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.
Body paragraph 2
The replacement changes include Marina private yachts
were
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being
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 changed to fishing boats,
where
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whereas
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 today Marina yachts
were
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are
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 placed next to
the
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apply
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cafes and shops.
Furthermore
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,
castle
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the castle
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 was converted into
the
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a
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 hotel in the middle of
river
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the river
a river
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.
In addition
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,
road
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the road
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 was renovated to the hotel way.
Body paragraph 3
Moreover
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,
port
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the port
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have
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has
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 been built new amenities
such
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 as
another
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other
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 showers and toilets above the car park.
Then
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,cafes and shops were constructed between the road and
lifeboat
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the lifeboat
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.There was one dock in
passenger
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the passenger
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 ferries area in 2000,
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however
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however,
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 today another dock is added
in
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on
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northern
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the northern
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 side.
Conclusion
On the other hand
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,some places have remained stable during the decades.For
exanple
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example
,
public
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the public
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 beach was stayed in the same place.Showers and toilets,car park
were
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apply
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retained
old
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their old
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 position
in
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on
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 the western side.Next,
main
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the main
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 road
was
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also remained
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also
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 remained .
Lifeboat
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The lifeboat
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was stayed
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stayed
has stayed
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 in the same position.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly introduce what you are comparing. Use simple phrases to start your report.
coherence
Organize your essay with clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should discuss one main idea.
coherence
Use linking words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to connect your ideas smoothly.
task achievement
You included key changes about the harbour, which is great!
task achievement
Some comparisons were made between 2000 and today, which shows understanding of the task.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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