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The two maps illustrate the development of Porth Harbour between the year 2000 and the present day.
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, the area has undergone significant changes, with the addition of several new facilities
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 as cafés, a hotel, and a private beach,
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 some original features have either been removed or relocated. In 2000, the eastern part of the harbour featured a public beach and a disused castle. The central area included fishing boats, a lifeboat station, and passenger ferries, with a marina for private yachts located to the west. There were
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 basic facilities
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 as a car park and a single
showers
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toilets
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 unit. Today, the castle has been replaced by a hotel, which now has its own private beach in the southeast. A second unit of showers and toilets has been added next to the original car park. The cafés and shops have been built adjacent to the marina.
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, the fishing boats and the marina have swapped locations, and a new dock has been constructed near the passenger ferries, likely to accommodate more ships. Another notable change is the road network.
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 the main road remains, new paths have been added to improve access to the hotel and other updated areas.
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, Porth Harbour has been modernized to offer more commercial and tourist-friendly facilities.

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Consider adding more specific details about the improvements or changes made to the beach and amenities, such as types of cafes or the size of the hotel.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'next', 'finally' to make the flow of information clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states the purpose of the maps, and try to summarize the main changes in a separate concluding sentence.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
The information is mostly relevant and you have explained the changes well.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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