The diagrams below show the layout of a student accommodation building 10 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below illustrates the design of a student hostel over a decade and its present look. Overview, from the diagram a couple of changes

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be clearly seen, the building has been reconstructed and remodelled with some additional student facilities.

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, the living room which was on the right

corner

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has been converted to kitchen/dining,

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bathroom on the bottom left

corner

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has equally been converted to a bedroom with no direct access from the bedroom compared to the old structure.

On the other hand

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, the garden on the top left

corner

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has been remodelled

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a car parking space with its own access,

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and the

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large bedroom on the top left

corner

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has been reconstructed

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an ensuite.

Finally

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, the space used for kitchen/

dinning

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dining

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a decade ago has fully been converted

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into

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a bike storage.

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May 27, 2025

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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5 paragraphs

136 words

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