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The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurews and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurews and make comparisons where relevant.
THE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATE THE PROPORTION OF PEOPLE IN THE UK WHO HAVE BEEN CONSUMING THE RECOMMENDED DAILY AMOUNT OF FRUIT AND VEGETABLES FROM 2002 TO 2010.
OVERALL
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, IT IS SHOWN THAT THE MAJORITY OF WHO CONSUMED THE DAILY RECOMMENDED AMOUNT ARE FEMALES, AND THE MINORITY ARE
CHILDREN
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ACCORDING TO
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 THE CHART IN 2002 ONLY 11% OF
CHILDREN
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 MANAGED TO TAKE THEIR DAILY AMOUNT OF FRUIT AND VEGETABLES,THE MALES AT 22% MEANWHILE,
WOMEN
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 AT THE HIGHEST WITH 25%, IN 2006 THE PERCENTAGE OF KIDS EATING THEIR DAILY FRUIT AND VEGETABLES INCREASED WITH 4 PER CENT, ON THE HAND, MEN REACHED 28 PER CENT FURTERMORE,
WOMEN
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 REMAIMED THE HIGHEST WITH 32%. IN THE
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 YEAR SHOWN IN THE CHART 2010 THERE WAS A SIGNIFICANT DECREASE IN ALL
WOMEN
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, MEN, AND
CHILDREN
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, WITH
WOMEN
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 DECLINING FROM 32% TO 27%, MEN FROM 28% TO 24% AND
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CHILDREN
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 FROM 16% TO 14%

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words children, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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