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the line graph below shows the numbers of enquiries recived by the tourist information office in one city over a six months period in 2011.

the line graph below shows the numbers of enquiries recived by the tourist information office in one city over a six months period in 2011.
.The line graph provides information about the percentages of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over
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six-month cycle in the year 2011.
overall
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, the enquiries numbers by telephone and in person showed a steady but increasing trend over the period .
however
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 by letter/email showed a stable and downward trend , in the beginning, the enquire in person was the lowest rate
then
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 it outraced both by letter /email and by telephone .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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