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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages • say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear

Dear James, I hope you are doing well. I am so thrilled that
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 made mind to explore
outdoors
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the outdoors
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, as a regular camper, I would provide you with some guidance to prepare you for
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upcomming
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upcoming
 camping holiday. Camps are often conducted in forests and national parks which are well-regulated so do not worry about wild animals.
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, I advise you to pack
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 t-shirts, Full-pants, and socks to avoid teak bites. You should
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 take a raincoat and
water resitant
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water-resistant
 hiking boots to shield yourself from
rainstorm
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. I think
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 camping holiday will have
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 impact on you and would remedy your work fatigue. Since, spending time in nature lowers cortisol levels, which
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 decreases stress, anxiety and burnout.
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, the only drawback
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 his type
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holidays
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holiday
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 is the mosquito attacks, even mosquito
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 are ineffective
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 their attacks, so be
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 for unpleasant nights. Thanks for inviting me to join your excursion
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, I have can't make it to
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 adventure as I prior commitments. Best regards, John

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear structure with each paragraph focusing on one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use more simple sentences to make your points clearer.
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Try to explain your points more clearly, especially about the disadvantages of camping.
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Ensure your language is accurate and check for spelling errors, like 'upcoming' instead of 'upcomming'.
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You provided good reasons why camping is beneficial for your friend.
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Your friendly tone makes the letter feel warm and inviting.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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