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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant. Porth Harbour (in 2000) Publicbeach

The two maps illustrate the changes in Porth
Harbour
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 between the year 2000 and today. Several significant developments have taken place, transforming the area into a more modern and tourist-friendly location. In 2000, the
harbour
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 featured a fishing boat dock, a marina for private yachts, and a passenger ferry area. A car park, showers and toilets, and a disused castle were located nearby,
along with
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 a public beach on the eastern side. Today,
while
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 the general layout remains the same, several upgrades are evident. Notably, cafés and shops have been added near the marina, enhancing the area’s appeal to visitors.
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, the disused castle has been replaced with a hotel, which now has access to a private beach. A second set of showers and toilets has
also
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 been installed near the fishing boat dock, likely to accommodate increased visitor numbers.
Overall
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, Porth
Harbour
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 has shifted from a modest functional
harbour
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 to a more developed area.

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Make sure to clearly state the main changes in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to help your paragraphs connect better, like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally'.
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Add more specific details about the changes, such as the size or style of the new buildings.
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The response provides a clear overview of the main changes in Porth Harbour.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay is generally logical, presenting a progression of changes.

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