In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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as cars, buses and trucks will not be driven by humans, and there will be only passengers on these
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disadvantageous, which is a crucial topic.
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, some people think that
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vehicles
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provide an efficient labour solution and it is safer than
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driven by humans.
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, their counterpart assumes that the
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without a driver affects their job opportunities and might have technical issues during the process. The aforementioned perspectives will be discussed thoroughly in the following paragraphs, and my personal opinion will be stated in the conclusion. On the one hand, when
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are in use, an amount of labour cost will be saved and the human resource department does not need to worry about labour management.
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, every six months, the train drivers in Sydney, Australia, operate a strike to demand higher pay. Any time the strike is on, the whole train system is shut down.
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causes a lot of inconvenience for people who are using the train as a main
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as being late for work, longer time to wait or travel. So if the trains are
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, the harm is not
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be happen.
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, the disadvantage of not having drivers in
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will be more weight
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fewer employment opportunities and these people who are laid back might become a negative aspect for the community.
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, technical issues can never be predicted.
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, they are all coded by machine and number. When the faults appear and can not be fixed on time, the consequences will be significant. In conclusion, the
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vehicle might be an effective solution, but the disadvantage side is heavier and needs
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assessment.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Your opinion should be clear from the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader. This will help in understanding the main point of each section.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
content
You presented both sides of the argument, which is good for balance.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear structure with separate paragraphs for different ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
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  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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